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Blog post due -- what do you need to revise on your drafts to show more clarity, conviction, commitment, emotion, and overall strengthen your performance. Be specific on what you need to revise and why. 300 words. 
the best way to perform and revise my draft will be to make sure that we have connection. in the play there really are only two characters, the son and the night woman, but the angel and devil are more of a consperisy. they are not really there but they are in the night woman's head. the night woman is fighting with her thoughts and so to have connection between both of them it will make it clear that they are truly in her head and she cant make a decision because she feels both ways are right. as far as clarity i think it will clear up the plot and make it easier to follow and understand, if my character acts as if they aren't there (which they aren't technically). a way i can do this in my draft is kind of walk around them as if they aren't there and, talk to myself as they are talking to me. the decision that i'm making is weather or not i should let the man inside and do my job. the emotion that i could bring to the scene can be making sure that i add a lot of body language to show how tide i am between both options. the emotional attachment will be to my son the entire play. the reason i am doing what i'm doing is all for my son, so i am really trying to put the audience in my shoes to show them how it would feel if they were in my place, and show them that i am struggling to make a life changing decision. when it comes to conviction i feel the most convicted going to the door and letting him in, or staying and not letting him in. what i can improve on is making sure that i show the struggle of leaving him at the door and show that that is my time to really choose. 

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