I think what I could really improve on in the final essay is making sure that I include some key things. For example, I got scored a 0 in three categories which were correct work cited, MLA citations, and a creative title. I lacked to incorporate these three things which resulted in an absence of points. To make a creative title I can simply use a characteristic of my character in the play and the  way that she behaves for example I could make my title the overbearing wishes of a single mother. This title can work in some cases because Amanda is a single mother who has so many expectations but she doesn’t know how to control her emotions to make it not so overwhelming.one of my strong suits where analyzing the quotes and giving good details on my performance and performance strategies. I can work on also coming with a more powerful thesis and putting it at the end of my into paragraph. I lost some points also with having a good use of topic and ending sentences. Which means that I can try to end my essay stronger and have a good way to end my essay, and also I can make sure my introduction paragraph is ended well so that it can build into my essay and the rest of the paragraph. The introduction should include something that sets up the essay and it should provide context or background info. For example the title of he play, the author, where it takes place etc. so when I make my new draft I’m going to make sure hat i add those things into the first introduction.

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